If for every path not taken
There is a parallel universe,
For very chorus heard
There is a silent verse.
City moves in maddening chaos,
As we get lost in crowds and its throes,
Searching for a blindfold to pathos ,
Not once looking to the undertows.
The moments between phone rings,
The poetry despite the text message blur,
The mindful breaths between desperate pangs,
Is when air becomes breath.
Pauses before punch lines,
The loud note and then the softer,
Elegant strokes of blank canvas,
Amidst splashes of colour.
/* So this one is about the virtues of silence and minimalism. I think in the fast and chaotic world we find ourselves in , the few moments of silence and poignant observation are rather amiss and rare. Great work of art always have paid attention to this idea. How many notes does BB King have to play to say what he wants to say and how many words does Hemingway have to write to convey all the horrors of war? I think we could all benefit from a few moments of silence and reserve in a world full of noise and chaos. Of course , too much of silence can never be a good thing, but given how fast and loud modern life has become , it is always great when art remind us to take a moment and just observe.*/
That first Stanza knocked my socks off, and then I discovered air around me "become breath." Wow. I have heard the holy silence in Bach.
ReplyDeletethank you ! yes Bach has those elements in abundance !
DeleteSilence is a powerful tool and when used correctly it can lead us to so many unsolved mysteries.
ReplyDeletetrue indeed !
DeleteThe loud note and then the softer,
ReplyDeleteElegant strokes of blank canvas,
Amidst splashes of colour.
The soothing emptiness of the canvas can lead to lots of great moments of colors. Very true Suyash!
Hank
Wonderful take on the prompt Suyash :D indeed we tend to get lost in the chaos and madness. It is moments of silence which truly jolts us back into reality. Thank you so much for participating :D
ReplyDeleteLots of love,
Sanaa
Elegant strokes of blank canvas,
ReplyDeleteAmidst splashes of colour
are what this world does not hear or see
are the unwritten music which colours all of me...
wow , that makes for one amazing alternative ending !
DeleteGreat art uses both positive and negative space, the busy-ness and the silence.
ReplyDeleteWe definitely need to take advantage of those moments of silence between all the things that keep us busy in today's world. You have really got me thinking about the idea of parallel universes!
ReplyDeleteIn every poem, perfection lies in the caesura... just like that pause between heartbeats... silence is everywhere.
ReplyDeleteSilence can be healing.... we needs those times.
ReplyDeleteWhat you have depicted so beautifully here reminds me of a Rumi quote that I love: "In silence there is eloquence. Stop weaving and see how the pattern improves."
ReplyDeleteyes, we do need to stop weaving at times .... rumi wisdom
DeleteFor very chorus heard
ReplyDeleteThere is a silent verse.
Excellent line!
I loved the last lines:
ReplyDelete"Pauses before punch lines,
The loud note and then the softer,
Elegant strokes of blank canvas,
Amidst splashes of colour."
Good one!
What a beginning..Wowzers Suyash..silence is moments of loftiness...
ReplyDeleteThe essence of mindfulness perhaps? It truly is what happens (or not) in those precious gaps that often seem so important and meaningful ..a wonderfully meditative and reflective poem
ReplyDeletei appreciated the yin/yang you portray in this piece. yes, silence and solitude is a waning commodity in our world today and if we can find that moment we should cherish it
ReplyDeletegracias, well penned
How right you are, the pause; that sweet silence that underlines the following words is so important. Great writing.
ReplyDeleteExquisite - reads like a symphony.. lushness of a world in the pauses - a mirrored alternate parallel Universe ...stuuuuuning ❤️❤️
ReplyDeleteOne of my favorite songs, The Sounds of Silence. I couldn't agree more with your thoughts about needed time for silence, space, whiteness....minimalism. I seek that more now in my life and am content with it for longer periods.
ReplyDeleteYour poem is fabulous at conveying this thought!
Donna@LivingFromHappiness
Yes minimalism!
DeleteI am most intrigued by "If for every path not taken, there is a parallel universe....." Cool. I often think I took that wrong turning somewhere, LOL.
ReplyDeleteIt is an intriguing idea !
DeleteGreat poem! the need for silence is so mind boggling to some. When I can enjoy the silence I can recharge to the fullest extent and be ready for whatever waits.
ReplyDeleteI couldn't agree more... art somehow must point towards silent moments... to things between things, half hidden.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written. It was a great read :)
ReplyDeleteI can feel the second stanza. You are a true poet in the making. Love how you substitute words for happenings that is a part of an everyday experience in the city. Love, love, loved it!!!
ReplyDeleteThank you !
DeleteBeautiful take on silence - on the pauses between sounds.
ReplyDeleteI am a hermit by choice, and silence, once feared, has become a friend. Love your poem. The song is an old favorite and whenever I hear it, I need to pause and listen, and sing quietly along. It is rich with good memories,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
hermit by choice ? that's very interesting !
Deletehow good are simon and garfunkel ?
Oh yes...loquacious silence! You've wonderfully made it... :-)
ReplyDeletestrange, i was writing about the need to slow down too...:)
ReplyDeletenice contrasting images you have painted in your poem.
Lovely reflection:
ReplyDelete"City moves in maddening chaos,
As we get lost in crowds and its throes,
Searching for a blindfold to pathos ,
Not once looking to the undertows."
Thanks for sharing!
There is a lot of depth in this thought-provoking beautifully rendered piece.
ReplyDeleteThat first verse, just wow. No words. just wow. what a contrast. :)
ReplyDeleteI simply love "when air becomes breath." This is how I feel in nature. Fresh air is literally breathing again.
ReplyDeleteThis is a beautiful reflection on the importance of silence. I make sure I get daily times of silence. I don't think I could survive without it. The world out there can be overwhelming with its chaotic energy. I love that song by Simon and Garfunkel, one of my all time favorites.
ReplyDeleteGayle ~
A lovely take on silence ~
ReplyDeleteAppreciating silence more and more as I get older. I especially like the blank canvas analogy and the line 'when air becomes breath'.
ReplyDeleteyes, we need to listen to that which is unsaid, listen to the silence more than we do. beautiful lines
ReplyDeleteToo often happiness
ReplyDeleteis thought of in words
or silence as a state of
mind over body..
for me at least..
i must dance
free without
instruction..
to ever catch
boDy back
up to miNd
iN balanCe..
wHere theRe
can be a peaceful
eye now oF Hurricane..
in a dance so complex
to the outer eye.. but
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a boDy
that
feels
how..
without
any human
words at aLL..
magic iS possiBle
but free iS magic..
dance.. to me..
@lEast..:)
this has to be one of the best comments on this blog
DeleteThis is such a great reflection on the value of silence. (Wish I hadn't had to miss Sanaa's prompt). I really like this:
ReplyDeleteThe mindful breaths between desperate pangs,
Is when air becomes breath
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